Need a production sequence
Better pacing at the beginning
More shot variety of Frazer when waking up
More intercutting - so the audience know right away that he has PTSD
No Soundtrack
POV shot of washing the hands
Slower cuts from bucket to tap to engage the audience more
Motivation of movement
Need typography
Hold the flashback and forward shots for an extra second each - the audience is too confused - the cut backs are too quick
Frazers reaction to the flashback in the mirror/s
Inc a shot of the house not exploded
Inc a sound that makes Frazer want to look out of the window
Frazer looks out of the window for 3 seconds too long - more consistency in lengths of shots
The pacing lacks any consistency
More high / low / canted / distance - more shot variation when Frazer is waking up
Clue to what why Frazer is having a nightmare at the beginning
Needs more engagement of the character, so that the audience have a good understanding of the story line
Credit to Mariella, i have edited slightly
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